Wow, Amy, just wow!
You put so much emotion and depth into this that I'm finding it hard to put my feelings into words. But this is supposed to be a review, after all, so I'll give it a try *takes a moment to compose herself*
I don't know whether you picked Ariana yourself or whether you were given the character as part of the challenge, but in any case I really loved the premise for this story. It's so nice to read about a character we don't know all that much about, so I found it very unique, at least as far as my fanfiction reading experience goes.
I was very impressed with the way you jumped straight in without much (or any) preamble, yet still managed to make me feel for the main character immediately. I mean, I already sympathised with Ariana and was completely drawn into the story by the end of the first line!
Your characterisation was wonderful too. I can really imagine that those kind of thoughts would have been running through her mind at the time. Some of them would not even have occurred to me, e.g. her self-perception ("They don't seem to understand that I'm dangerous", "I can't be trusted, you never know when it will happen"). Somehow it never crossed my mind that she'd be so aware of her own condition, and I loved reading that because it gave me an entirely new perspective of her.
And as I said at the beginning, this was so emotional! Especially the sentence about her mother lying limp and lifeless really got to me for some reason. I could feel tears brimming in my eyes when I read that, and when I reached the last paragraph, I could hold them in no longer. And believe me, I do not cry easily, so that's saying something!
Overall a wonderful story that not only gave me new insights into Ariana's mind, but also yours. You're always so crazy and random and fun, and you know that I love all that about you, but it was nice to see your other, more serious and thoughtful side through this story.
Author's Response: Aww, Pia, I love you so much! :D
It was a challenge, but I did pick Ariana myself! I thought that she had never really been written about, especially not in this way, so I thought it would be a nice change :D It was interesting to try and get into her head and imagine what she would think. i just hope I did it well :D I had always thought that she would understand he condition due to the age she was, and at that age you are usually more self-aware.
Awww, I'm sorry I made you cry! But I'm glad it had that kind of impact!
See? I'm not all randomness and smiley faces :P But thank you so much for your review!!! I loves you :D