Hello I'm here with your review.
I only found a couple of mistakes which are: "With the end of year exams and the late night party, they had completely forgotten that the last three days where free periods to Fifth year and up. " Where should be were. And "I agree that we must help them this time, that I know of much." In this part you need to switch around the wording a bit so that it says "I agree that we must help them this time, that much I know of." Other then this though I didnt catch anything else that needs to be changed.
I think this is a really interesting idea and something that I never would have thought of. I love how you are including the portraits- Gryffindor, Ravenclaw, Hufflepuff, and Slytherin into the story and kind of giving them a bigger part to play. I can't wait to find out more about why all of the other protraits are gone and how come nobody else but Hermione remembers that they are supposed to be in different houses.
Your description is really good. Throughout the whole chapter and you really build up on the scenes which are great. I like how you explained about the room and gave us background information on it right away so that we weren't confused at all about what it was. Your characterization is really good for the founders as well. I found them to be pretty spot on to how I could imagine them.
The idea that Hermione is afraid of water is a rather interesting one. Also I thought that having them outside playing in the water was a cool idea. I have never really thought of that.. and I'm not sure why I mean it's a lake of course people would want to go swimming and have fun.. so kudos for that.
I think this is a really good story and you seem to have an interesting idea going on for it. Hermione is with Fred but she is in Slytherin, there are now nine years at hogwarts, and the headmaster is Riddle. I'm excited to see where this story goes from here. You've gotten me interested and I can't wait to see how everything plays out. Great Job!
Author's Response: Hello!!!
Phew, I thught when you said a few mistakes, I was like :o no! lol, but its alright, there is actually only a few ^_6 I'll fix those up rigt away,
First of all, I really want to apologiuze for how long it has taken me to reply, I general reply instantly, but when I have an in depth review, It takes me a little while longer, so I am very sorry for how long it has taken me to reply ^_^
I wanted to have them as portraits as in other stories I have them as ghosts, only the students can't see them, so I wanted to do something different and go for portraits, and I am glad that everyone has said that it works. !!
Hermione is at the moment the only one who rememberes but there are a few others who remember, only they haven't been introduced yet ^_^
Nawww, thank you for the compliment on my description :D that makes me happy ^_^ The ircular room plays a minor part in the book, so I needed the background information there almost instantly, so I am glad you got the feel of how the room was meant to be and what it was :D
The founders I actually thought were really hard to write but easy, cause we don't know much about them and yet that always makes things hard but easy, similiar to next gen I guess.
Nawww, thank you ^_^. Yes it is a lake, and I am sure people went swimming lol, having a jetty at Hgwarts though? well that I am not so sure of :P
Oh, I am glad you liked it ^_^ When chapter three is ready I will come back and request a review ^_^
Thank you so much for your lovely honest review !!