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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
This was lovely. I'm left with an overwhelming sense of sadness after reading this but I finished with a smile, like the Quidditch Pitch because of its fond memories.

I don't know if I've ever read a story from an inanimate object's perspective so this may be my first and you've certainly packed a punch. You evoked a lot of emotion and put such beautiful details into the story that you brought the Pitch to life.

I think my favorite part was the paragraph about the Pitch during Goblet of Fire, how it was annoyed with the maze marring its natural beauty and how it didn't need magic to be beautiful because it already was. That was just lovely.

I found it interesting that the students who died to protect the Pitch and their school were ones who hadn't sought comfort or played Quidditch there but still felt drawn to this piece of Hogwarts' history and the students that lived there. The imagery of them fighting for the banners of their individual houses but having them standing together, just gut-wrenching.

There were a few awkward sentences such as:
It lent an ear to listen to meaningless rants and emotional outbursts and it provided shelter when rain pounded hard on from the heavens above and the warmth of the castle was too far away to run back up there. - I don't think 'to listen' needs to be in that sentence and the 'on' after 'pounded hard' sounds awkward as well.

Some words were randomly capitalized as well. I'm not sure if that was intentional or not but it threw me off while I was reading.

Other than that though, this was such a wonderfully sad one-shot. The ending was perfect. Really, really nicely done. :)

Author's Response: Hello ^_^

Really :) Oh thats a relief I was so worried about posting this as it is my first ever One-shot :P

Took A leap in otherwords right? :/ Maybe o.o Sorry im a little slow today :P That's what I was aiming for ^_6 To give the pitch life, so Im glad you could see that ^_^ x

I didn't actually have that in there first off, Mangagirl told me to add it so I did :) so now i'm glad they suggested it ^_^

I didn't want it to be people like that we knew... That had minor parts like a few of the Slytherins such as Theodore and Millicent, or susan bones... blah blah blah.. I just wanted them unnamed and haveing little history with the Pitch as possibly ^_^ so i;m glad you liked those parts.

I'll refix that shortly ^_^ Thank you for your loving words and awesome review ^_^ It made my day >.< x


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