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Review:Phoenix_Flames says:
Hello there! I'm here with your review as requested!

This was a great opening chapter. I think you are off to a great start and have a very unique and original story coming a long here. I can't wait to see where you take it.

You started off perfectly. That opening line was brilliant. It sucked me right in and I had to know just what wasn't fair. Then your details from Louis' thoughts about the explosion were perfect. Absolutely wonderful. I actually had quite a laugh out of them. You put so much of Louis' personality and character into all of it and made it quite entertaining to read.

I love your characterization of Louis. He is really great, and I honestly don't think I have ever read such a unique next gen fic about him. Actually I don't think I've read a single fic in which he is the main character. Not only that, but his sexual orientation is yet another thing that sets this story apart from all the others and makes it unique and original. Really wonderful! So creative!

I love that it is in first person from Louis' POV. It helps us to learn his character so much faster, and he has quite the sense of humor. It is great to read; it really is. He is funny and with his words you pull the reader in. Love his character.

And Dominique as well! I thought you did a great job with her. We tend to see Dominique as more of a tom-boy in most fics I feel, so it w as great to see a girly side of her. You really have awesome characterizations!

This is a great start to the story, and I can't wait to see where you take all of this. You have a brilliant set up here. There was never too much of anything at any given time; never too much descriptions, introductions, actions, dialogue, etc. It was all spaced perfectly and made for a brilliant flow. Also with all of Louis' thoughts and comments here and ther, it really added personality and life to the story.

Absolute great job! I'm very glad you requested, and I'm sorry I don't have much CC for you, but there isn't much of anything bad to say. So I hope this was somewhat helpful for you. Thanks for the request! Come stop by again once the next chapter is up! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for coming by!
You have no idea how much that means to me! The parts about liking his characterization. I've spent so much time on his details that I was terrified he wouldn't be accepted as I saw him. *suppresses squeal*

I was so scared about writing this in first person, since I'm a female. So thank you again, you're a total confidence boost, like you have no idea how much you made me feel relieved and more sure of the story.

Aww thank you. I kinda wish there was more Domi in the story cause she was so fun to write. I love snarky girls sometimes. :P

Thank you so much, again! ♥ --Jenna

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