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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

I think that this story of their relationship was well done and realistic. It would have been impossible, or next to, for them to have continued their relationship through the war. I liked how you ended the story- sad and bittersweet. Draco was alive, but they couldn't be together. Was Draco pretending to be dead, to avoid Voldemort? I also liked the lines about remembrance- even if it'll never happen again, they still have their memories and they can never be taken from them.

However, I thought that you were unable to get into Room of Requirement if someone else was in there, so how was Hermione able to enter when Draco was hiding?

As well, Dumbledore referred to Hermione as "Hermione" and then "Miss Granger" when she was talking with him. I believe "Miss Granger" would be more appropriate as she is still a student and he hasn't had as much contact with her as he did with Harry.

The only other point I noticed was from the line " she knew she needed to go". I think that you should elaborate on this point. Does she feel she needs to go out of decency? Out of curiosity? Out of want? I think it would be more effective and help to explain the start of their relationship better if you added a little more.

Your story flowed very smoothly and I liked how the flashbacks led up to the current day: June 29th. I think that the scenes you chose to write were excellent in giving a good background to their relationship. They really showed the progression, from enemies to neutral acquaintances to friends to something more.

The line " The day passed like molasses" is fantastic description and your story flowed smoothly from one point to the next. Your characterization was good- Hermione was understanding and Draco was worried and afraid for his family. The only thing I was a little confused about in this regard was Snape's "It's over!" I don't think he'd yell during battle- he always seemed more silent and deadly when he was fighting. But then again, he only had one line in the whole story.

All in all, I really enjoyed reading your story and thanks so much for requesting another review!

Author's Response: Hi there!

Thanks so much for reviewing. I'm so glad that you liked it. :] To clarify a few things:

The Room of Requirement needs you to be specific. If he'd forgotten to say, "where no one can find me while I'm there" or whatever, she would've been able to get in. Think of the D.A. and how they could all join each other there.

I'll definitely change Dumbledore references to Hermione to "Miss Granger." I definitely agree there.

She needed to go because she really HAD to see him again; she had to know how he was, what happened, etc.

And Snape shouting, "It's over!" is actually canon. He does that in HBP after he kills Dumbledore.

Okay, so: thank you so much for this review. I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the story.


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