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Review:Salem says:
Ohh I'd almost forgotten that they were sorted into different houses since the last time I read the previous chapter. But the way you handled their sortings was very interesting! Poor Lily...I really feel for her. I hope she makes some more friends and gets better at potions! And I hope she gets to talk to Severus, too! The first of many bad days to come...ohh that doesn't sound good :(

I like how you've portrayed all of the characters so far, though. Sirius is still Sirius, just more--I dunno, dedicated to the pureblood heritage? I really want to see what else you do with that in the future.

Oh, and about the first part of the chapter--the make up Lily is putting on? I'm not sure about that. I mean, she's a first year, so she's about eleven, right? It just seems a bit young for that kind of thing, in my opinion.

Author's Response: Hey again! :)

Yes, Lily does have a bit of a difficult time right off the bat. I'm glad you can feel a sense of pity for her, as I definitely wanted that to come through. I sort of wanted to play up her depressive nature and low self-esteem, which is why I had her putting on so much makeup. She thinks very little of herself, and so she tries to cover it up, and in doing so she covers up not only her physical form but also everything she's trying to hide underneath. It's a bit of a metaphor, I suppose. I know she's young, but the feelings she has are very dark, and they reflect the emotions of a much older woman. I hope it makes more sense to you now.

Sirius is still a bit of Sirius, to an extent, but you will see a very different man in the next few chapters than the one portrayed in canon. Sirius in this story is not someone that the Marauders would want to be friends with.

Thanks for another lovely review! :)

academica


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