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Review:fauxthefox says:
This is fauxthefox from the forums with your requested review!

I love the atmosphere you've built up from here! It's all very murky and dangerous and fragile. Even your summary is very intense. Your characters (although of course I don't know much about them yet) seem three dimensional and well thought through.

You've got a few awkward sentences here and there, such as, "Malfoy's mother made no comment as she visited her shamed husband in Azkaban." But for the most part, your grammar and flow are very good.

The POV changes aren't distracting - in fact, I really like the opening of the story from Stan's POV. I like your descriptions, too!



Author's Response: Hi Faux! Thanks for stopping by!

The mood is really brought on my description (another difficult one to balance, like backstory or dialogue) and because everything is dark and rainy and cold and intense. I hoped the summary would reflect the story, so it would hook readers in. Glad you liked it. I wanted really developed characters for this fic, so hopefully it'll work out.

How is that sentence awkward? Would love some feedback on how to fix it, maybe an example or something.

Good to know you like it. I hate POV changes, especially in third person. It's difficult to switch.

Thanks for the review.

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