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Review:academica says:
Hi! I'm here with another review for you :)

I LOVE that you wrote about Colin. Judging by the fact that the challenge was about the beginning and ending sentence, I'm going to assume that the character was your choice, and I'm so happy that you decided to highlight such a underloved character. I really like him because I think he conveys the thoughts and feelings of all the Hogwarts students we didn't get to meet, the ones who had normal, happy lives until Voldemort took over and turned those lives upside down. This one-shot definitely conveys that sense of normalcy. Just like all of the famous canon characters we know and love, people like Colin had dreams, hopes, losses, victories. Just like Colin, their innocence was stolen from them far too soon with the rise of the second wizarding war, the one their parents wanted so desperately to shield them from. I really felt that at the end, when Colin's family was grieving his loss. He, like all the others, was ordinary from beginning to end, and yet that doesn't imply, not at all, that his life wasn't meaningful.

This flowed very well, and it was quite poignant in its simplicity, an honest look at the life of a normal boy. I loved the little details you gave to his character, adding in depth that Rowling left out and most of us never think about. This piece seems like an actual eulogy, a believable epitaph. I didn't note any technical errors, but I wasn't expecting to.

In my opinion, you used the sentence you were given quite well. Just like your other work, this piece left me impressed.

Nicely done! Thanks so much for requesting once again, and of course, I hope that my feedback is useful to you :)

Amanda

Author's Response: Thanks so much for taking the time to review! I definitely agree with your comments about Colin. When I first thought of the beginning (and ending) sentence, it definitely seemed to me to fit Colin.

I'm so glad you think so as well- I knew from the beginning that this would be a very simple, straightforward story- and that you enjoyed the history I gave Colin.

I'm so glad you thought I used the sentence well and it put a big smile on my face to hear that this left you impressed.

Your feedback was definitely useful and thanks once again for reviewing!


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