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Review:honoraryweasley says:
Honoraryweasleyy from the forums here, with your review. My apologies for the delay!

I made a note to keep an eye on the entries to this challenge, because the list is hilarious. You did really well with the humour - I chuckled out loud a couple of times (it was more a delirious giggle, but oh well), but it was the kind of fic where the biggest joke is in Draco's character. Which brings me to how well you captured that! I was so impressed, honestly, because people attempt to write Draco so often, and usually fail. Either they make him completely OOC, or they make him a vain, fussy rich boy. And although he may be just that, depictions of him usually lack the depth that you added.

I'm a grammar Nazi, so I appreciate the lack of grammar errors in this, and I know a lot of other people will too. I spotted one mistake (you capitalized a dialogue tag, if I remember correctly), but I'm going to let that go ;) The flow was so perfect that one mistake couldn't detract from it. Your paragraphs were very long, and I might suggest breaking them up, but in actuality this is a very long one-shot and I don't see why us readers shouldn't have to really focus to read it ;)

Now, onto the ending. That was BRILLIANT. Only excellent authors can tie everything together like that, so simply and seamlessly, and you did it particularly well (that was one of the places I laughed out loud).

I pride myself on offering critique on almost every fic I read... but I CAN'T in this case. Well done!

x J

Author's Response: Hello!

Wow, what an unbelievably flattering review! Thank you so much for stopping by, and I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. The challenge really is interesting, and I'm glad that you found the story appropriately humorous. I'm also happy to see that you were impressed with my treatment of Draco's character. He's one of my favorites and I tried to do him better justice here, in a situation where I'm not attempting to make him into a romantic protagonist. I wanted to try to stick to canon, and it seems like I did that, which is wonderful to hear.

Thank you for pointing out the mistake; I'll have to go back and take a look. I'm a technical (grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc.) buff as well, so I like to know when I've made those errors. I am pleased to see that the flow made up for it, however, and that the long paragraphs didn't bother you too much.

The ending! It's my favorite part, and I'm so glad that you enjoyed it as well. I'm so incredibly flattered by your assertions, and I'm happy to see that it was tied together well. I wanted it to seem that way.

Thank you very much! Again, I'm so taken aback by your praise, and I appreciate your attentive review!

academica


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