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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
NO, SCORPIUS. COME BACK. I WANT TO SEE SCORPODIE KISSES IN THE RAIN.

Oh my god, this story is fascinating. The characters - I can't even describe it. The characters are freaking amazing, Hattie. They're so real and believable already and I am very curious to know more about them. I want to know why their relationship fell apart - if it's salvageable - if they're meant to be. The way that she can push at him, using words like venom and taunting him with rejecting him, reminding him that his father was gone and his mother was dying - just...wow. And as sick as it is, I want to see her break him. It feels like it would sort of heal the situation.

Their chemistry is just intoxicating.

A couple of my favorite bits:

A tiny gold ember flew from the flames and left a small dark hole on the rich oak flooring. - It's descriptions like these that sell a story to me. It's so vivid. I am extremely impressed.

I also loved the bit about history repeating itself with the licorice ring and then her rejecting him again later in life. Why did she reject him? WHO COULD REJECT SCORPIUS?! He's so beautiful here, I just want to climb inside the story and force him to love me. But then I can see her side of it - it feels like he definitely proposed for the wrong reasons. Is she testing him? It feels like she's testing him, pushing boundaries and pressing buttons to trigger something.

They flitted around the subject that pulled and prodded at their minds, never actually mentioning it to one another, but all the same they both knew that they were talking about it.
- Gahh. Your descriptions are perfect. Just perfect.

This story is so lovely, Hattie. I can't wait to see what happens next. That's an art with stories - the addicting quality. You've either got it or you don't, and you REALLY do.



Author's Response: Scorpodie? Really? Elpius. Elopius. Scordie. (Although that last one makes it sound like I'm threatening Scorpius... which is the last thing Skypeland wants).

Your lovely comments have literally made my day. I'm sorry it took so long for me to respond to this: I sat reading it over and over again and conniption occurred and it was all very beautiful. I wub you, Sarah. You're so kind. For Scorpius and Elodie, I was going for a Pip and Estella, as well as - a far less intellectual parallel though - Chuck and Blair from Gossip Girl. Scor and Elodie once loved each other, but now fight and fight and cause each other so much pain that in end they realise it isn't worth it, and after the slight burst of euphoria/adrenalin at the other's pain, they just feel bad because they desire each other/are attracted to one another.

Chemistry! Yay!

I tried to fit in memories so people could compare and contrast now and then. I wanted them to see that Scorpodie had been happy and in love and everything, but Scorpius changed that when he proposed and Elodie rejected him. You have to acknowledge that they do/did/whatever love each other and it's very hard for her to let go. You really have to think of her arguments with Scorpius as banter. Ish. Sort of. More emotionally jarring banter. I suppose she is testing him, in a way. She knows he's angry with her and that he hates her (she hates him too, but less, and more because of how he reacted rather than for proposing in the first place).

I WANT SCORPIUS TO LOVE ME TOO. I REALLY DO. HE'S SO SEXY AND BROODING.

Thank you, thank you, thank you so so so so so much for all your lovely comments and your points and your ideas, Sarah. Day = made because of this review. U r awzum. ♥


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