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Review:TheGoldenKneazle says:
Hi there! It's me off the forums with your review :)

This is a very funny idea for a one-shot, and I actually really enjoyed the insight into Malfoy's mind. His initial hatred of Moody was interesting to watch unravel, and his effortless arrogance and knowledge of his place. I also liked his take on Harry - how everyone loved him but would do nothing about Draco's taunts.

The descriptions of Draco's varying moods were also very good; I loved how he re-watched the day while lying in bed, and then how you kept the hatred of Moody and his upcoming lessons all the way through; it worked really well! I also liked your small descriptions of the people and places as Malfoy walked by.

The end of this was very unexpected and clever; having Hagrid pay the first-years to come out at him like that! The only complaint I'd have is that you didn't make it very obvious about the firsties at the end - what exactly are they doing? But I love how you slipped in that bit about Pansy at the end, it was very clever. I also liked that you had the ending in Hagrid's POV - it made it a lot more funny and easy to relate to!

Overall, great job!
~TGK

Author's Response: Hi there! Thanks for coming by :)

I'm glad Malfoy's characterization worked for you. I really enjoyed writing his feelings about Moody and also looking at Harry from his side of things. I tried to nail down the typical Malfoy arrogance, so I'm glad that worked, too.

I love details, and so I'm pleased that you appreciated the ones I included in this piece. I imagined that he would most likely dread Moody's class right up until it happened, and I tried to convey that with the first couple of scenes.

At the end, the first years were sort of closing in on Draco, and had he stuck around to hear it, they would have chorused the phrase of choice as a whole. The point was to create a dramatic effect by increasing the intensity of the repeated phrase. But I wanted to show that Draco was increasingly bothered by it, and so I had him hightail it out of there rather than just have them corner him. I hope that makes sense. In the end, Hagrid achieved his aim; Draco was too humiliated to show his face in public anymore that day.

So glad you thought my little twist was clever, and that you liked the bit about Pansy. I always find her very amusing to write.

Thanks again for your review!

academica


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