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Review:Lady of Tears says:
I'm here from the forums with your review!

I really liked your view on what happened afterwards. I really felt like I was there; especially at the start when Harry was by himself in the dorm room. I liked that he was so dazed, especially the description of the bludgers hitting him in the head.

As far as characterization goes, I thought you did well. I especially enjoyed the later reactions between all of the main characters. But that was where I also thought that it got kind of off; I didn't really see Harry being upset that they had given him a Sleeping Draught. I mean, maybe he wouldn't have picked it, but I didn't feel like he'd actually have words with anyone over it. After everything that happened, I think everyone would be very gentle with each other.

I also thought you could break up the paragraphs a bit more. They were a bit long, which made my eyes want to start skimming.

Other than that it's a great start to the story, and I'm glad you decided to expand it. I hope I helped some!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed the descriptions. Obviously I'm doing something right :). My personal take on the Sleeping Draught situation would be that Harry would be feeling emotional after the deaths and the fact that it's the end. If there's one thing I've taken from the books, it's that emotional Harry can tend to snap without thinking. Therefore I felt it was in character for Harry to feel annoyance at others taking control over his life and going behind his back. I hoped to portray that this feeling would only be temporary though, and he quickly dismisses it and accepts that he's making a fuss over nothing. So we'll have to agree to disagree on that one. Still, I appreciate the contradictory view. I'm always glad to hear other's opinions.

Paragraphs are something I'll keep in mind. Obviously I'm not used to formatting that well on this site yet, so it's something I'll try and correct. Thanks! :)

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