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Review:nitenel says:
Well here's your requested review! Just a little late...

Well there were no noticeable grammar or spelling issues. That can always "make or break" a fic to me. So that alone raised its standing in my mind.

I found it funny but no LOL funny. I smiled a lot but I just didn't laugh at all. Then again, I don't really laugh that much when reading. It takes a miracle to make me laugh while reading.

It seemed a little choppy, but I think you can fix that easily by simply breaking up your paragraphs a little. I think that would help a lot.

My favorite line was:
You just donít insult Lucius Malfoy, not in front of his son.

The one thing that ran through my head was, You wait until my father hears about that. (I think that's what it is, I haven't seen AVPM/S forever!)

All in all, this was definitely a good first humorous fic! My only two humor fics are anti-Twilight and barely humor, so good job to you!

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for the review!

That's okay about not laughing; as I've mentioned to a few other reviewers, I didn't really design it to be side-stitchingly hilarious. It's more meant to create a slightly humorous mental image for you, and your smiling indicates to me that maybe that did work.

Thanks for your comment on the choppiness as well. I'll try to go back and see what you mean and fix it in future works of mine.

I really appreciate you stopping by to review :)

academica


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