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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

This was a lovely one-shot. You captured one moment in their lives and you wrote it beautifully.

I loved the way you didn't say their names until the very end. It helped to give an air of mystery to the piece as well as give the impression that this could be any couple, at any point in time. You wrote it so that we could definitely feel the love they have for each other.

The style was very descriptive and poetic. You didn't include a lot of dialogue, which suited this story- sometimes dialogue can lessen the power of the story. I don't think couples would speak much during these moments- they'd instead comfort each other physically, like you've showed.

Just a question: any particular reason why you chose "adore" over "love"? Just wondering.

The flow was great- each paragraph, each description flowed smoothly from one sentence to another. As well, you described the scene well without reusing or overusing certain words or phrases, which was very nice to read.

All in all. I enjoyed reading this story. It was a very sweet and emotional piece that wasn't too short nor too long. You wrote this one-shot very well!

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm glad that you liked it! The mystery aspect of it all was more of an accident when I realised that I hadn't mentioned their names yet haha, but I decided to go with it :)

There's no particular reason why I chose 'adore' instead of 'love' - I just liked the way it sounded really, as if the extra syllable meant more. Weird, I know haha.

Thank you for such a wonderful review, I'm blushing! :)

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