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Review:Lady of Tears says:
Hello there! I'm here with your requested review!

First of all, I think you've got the tone of your story nailed down. I could really feel the tension, and the mystery of it all. The reader is left asking, "What's going on?" But in a good sort of way.

I think that changing the year is honestly a matter of personal preference. For me, the younger the student is, the more unrealistic it is. But that's not saying that it's not possible, and who says you have to write something that's completely realistic? And who says my way of thinking is realistic? If you see Ron as being capable of having a Christmas fling that young, then that's what you want for the story.

I loved the characterization you gave to the Weasley family. I think that's important because Ron has done something so wildly not canon. But Fred and George were perfect, and truly funny. I could feel the added stress on the family.

There were a few punctuation things that could be cleaned up with some close reading. A beta would be great to help with those small sort of things.

I think you've got a very original story here, and I'm interested to see where you go with it.

Author's Response: Thanks :)
I was worried about the age because originaly I completely agreed with you but the plot I have in mind fits so well with Book 5! It's a bit of a challenge I'm atempting to get over!

Thanks for your help :)


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