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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
Hi there!

So I really enjoyed this light-hearted story. Your descriptions are fantastic and you really bring your words to life. I love the small details you pay attention to, like the tear in his curtain. It just makes things more real, you know?

I think you did an excellent job with Draco's characterization here. At the beginning you really brought home the idea of Malfoy's privileged life and his ego so it was interesting to see the contrast between that arrogant Malfoy and the humiliated Malfoy you wrote here. Writing from the POV of Malfoy the ferret was great too - you really made the reader see the scene from the height of a ferret, you could just picture Malfoy's body changing and seeing his small paws through his own eyes.

I was a bit surprised by Draco's reaction first to Seamus and then the first year who interrupted Moody's class. I don't know but I thought he'd be a bit more angry and defensive. Maybe because he was still humiliated, but I always thought even when he was embarrassed, Draco made it a point to...well, not be vicious, exactly...but be a bit more nasty, I guess? Just my personal opinion.

I loved that Hagrid had paid off the first years with chocolate to mock Draco whenever they heard his name. To think he did that for Buckbeak, it's just so precious. I loved it. :)

It's interesting to read this type of story from you because you write angst so well. I think the story flowed very well but I'm not sure if I found it that funny. It was humorous for sure but I kind of wish that I actually laughed reading it. I think maybe I didn't find the tone of the narrative to be funny. I hope you continue to explore this genre and continue to improve because I think you have the potential to be a great humor writer given the correct plot and characters.

Overall, it was a nice, light-hearted fic that I really enjoyed. Good luck with the challenge! :)

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for stopping by :)

I'm glad you liked the description; I did try to focus a little on that in order to help bring the ferret experience home to the reader and emphasize how traumatic it was for Draco.

I've gotten a couple of comments on Draco's muted response, and I think it's a good point. When I wrote it, I was picturing him as being a little too much in shock to come up with a comeback of Malfoy-level proportions, but I can also see him snapping out of it more quickly and letting that snark go full force. I'll definitely remember that next time I write him.

I thought people would like to see Hagrid get his turn at Malfoy :) He and Buckbeak went through way too much for Malfoy to get off scot-free, and I bet Hagrid would love any excuse to hand out sweets to the firsties.

Thanks for your feedback on the humor. I'm not exactly sure if I designed it to be laugh out loud funny, but I'm happy to see that it at least entertained you a bit. It's my first attempt, so hopefully I'll grow with it as I try other humorous pieces.

Thanks :) And thanks again for the review!

Amanda


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