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Review:fauxthefox says:
Hullo there :) This is fauxthefox from the forums with your requested review!

First off, I'd just like to say that I LOVE your summary. I'm also all for your choice to write about Caradoc. I've always been curious about the other people in Moody's picture.

I like Caradoc a lot, and I'd like to see him given even more depth over the course of the story. It's definitely interesting that you've made him a Slytherin - maybe in chapters to come you'll explain what influenced him to go against his fellow Purebloods? The poor guy really cuts himself off from society, which is a bit sad, but makes for a really interesting character.

All the technicalities of the Order meeting seem pretty much spot-on. Even Dumbledore's dialogue (which most people seem to murder) was believable.

Nothing in terms of grammar/canon issues.

I think that the sense of danger could be more palpable. Maybe people could keep looking out the window during the meetings? Or Peter could be acting frightened. The way that people react to a situation is what really makes the reader feel it.

This was so great! :) Feel free to request again if you'd like another review!



Author's Response: The fact that you like my summary makes me so happy you wouldn't believe - I absolutely hate writing them and find them incredibly difficult.
Caradoc will definitely (hopefully) develop over the course of the story, and you'll see some of his views come out. I haven't entirely decided his situation yet, that's still in the works, tbh, but your question has definitely made me think about it :P
Hm... I'll certainly consider what you said for further chapters, thanks for pointing that out! I wasn't too sure myself...
Thanks so much for reviewing!

Aph xx

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