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Review:Manga_girl says:
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Hello, I'm mangagirl from the forums for your review!

First of all, I havce to say I love your story! Why? Everything! The description, the tiny details, I cant pick up a bad point!

So, to stayt, I want to praise you of your characterisation. Its so real, I can see the characters dancing off the page! Caradoc is such a cool character! I mean he isnt too perfect or covered in faults, he is realistic and thats what I love in characters. And the fact that he is a Slytherin but has all those views is cool, I like to see that in a character!

Then there is the marauders and Lily. The way you write them sounds so realistic and I can imagine Lily how you describe her and ditto with the others. I love real characters, not wooden boards and I had pleasure from reading this!

The other great character I love in this is Dumbledore. He sounds so much like he does in the book and i can really see him. I think it is harder than it looks portreying canon characters how they are in the book and you have done it beautifully, well done!

I think this flows well into everything and it seems so real. I know I keep on saying that but its true, I love this so much! I dont know what to comment on for you to improve, its so cool and if there was one thing, I would make the ending a bit clearer but apart from that, this is an amazing story with fab description and characterisation! Well done!

Emma xx

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I have to say, I love Caradoc, too and I deliberately gave him a bunch of faults (like hypocrisy) to steer him firmly away from the Gary Stu region of things as that is one of my pet peeves. Him being a Slytherin wasn't planned at all - it kinda happened. I had to put him in a house and Slytherin just seemed to fit. It was never going to be Gryffindor, though.
I'm glad you like Lily and Dumbledore - speaking of whom, it is so hard to get him right. He infuriates me, lol.
I'll take a look at the ending again when I'm editing this - there's a queue for the queue at the moment - so thanks for mentioning that!
Thank you for your review!

Aph xx


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