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Review:ravenclaw_princess says:
Well done on an exceptionally well written story. The flow and pacing was magnificent and I was completely engrossed through out the whole piece.

I liked the charactersiations of everyone, especially the Slytherins. You really showed there 'elite' ways and I liked how you described them and their spot by the lake. It reminded me of the 'popular' group at school who you just didn't go near unless asked to.

Your projection of Bellatrix is quite cool. Later in life she is pretty deranged and I liked her seeming more normal her, yet still with her commanding presence.

Ted was very sweet with all his crushes. It was kind of like he fell for Andromeda without even realising it at the time. He was aiming so high in who he thought he wanted as a girlfriend, but then he actually got to know someone, rather than just falling for looks and status.

The quote was weaved into the story really well and it goes along with the who 'popular' kids thing that the Slytherin Elite represent. There were a lot of lovely descriptions through out the story which set such a nice atmosphere. Grammar and spelling were also wonderful. I really enjoyed this story. Well done.

Author's Response: I really enjoyed writing this piece, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!
Having read a lot of Marauders' stuff it seemed that they often had a place where they would always go, and I thought well, wouldn't the 'elite' purebloods make sure they had somewhere which was 'theirs' as well? It kinda made sense and it fitted in well. Also, it was kinda a reflection of things at my school, where there is a group like that.
I like Ted, although I've never written him before, and I wanted to do something other than 'he falls for Andromeda, she falls for him, they get married' because it tends to be cliché (originally he was going to like her from the beginning) and then I remembered how similar she and Bella were supposed to look and a plunny just formed in my head.
Putting the quote in this story killed me, lol. I just kept writing, trying to find a place to put it in, so it's good you thought it worked.
Thanks for your lovely review!

Aph xx


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