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Review:Atomic says:
Hello again!!

So I absolutely love how much we're really getting to know Cho in this chapter. She seems like she's having a really hard time with her life right now, with being on her own and trying to grow up and do something with her life. I really like the valiant effort she's making to be friendly towards Hermione.

The only thing that got me in this chapter was when Angelina was talking to Alicia and she said " His brother's done what he can to put back the Wizarding Wheezes, but George's still a mess." Is Fred still alive in this story? The use of "his brother" makes it sound like Fred survived the war, and it sort of threw me off.

But otherwise, your characterization was great. We're really seeing great character development and it's all very on course.

Dialogue is funny and realistic as always!! And the plot flow was better in this chapter, with Hermione being introduced.

Great job!!

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