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Review:academica says:
Hey there! Here with your requested review :)

First of all, this isn't really relevant to your story, but the banner and CI are so unique and pretty :) Nice choice there!

This was a very nice start, and I think you did just fine writing in Hogwarts Era. I really liked your characterization, especially the way you did Luna. I could easily picture Evanna Lynch acting and saying the lines just as you wrote them. I definitely see Angel as a bit different, but not as optimistic as Luna, just as you said. To me, she seems a little bit like a rebel, maybe even a little tomboy-ish. She kind of does things her way and just deals with everyone else the best that she can. All in all, you've got a pretty interesting OC there.

The story flowed nicely and the plot is interesting so far. I liked the way you set up the chapter, describing the empty halls and Angel's haphazard dress. That was a nice little bit of imagery. I also didn't spot any grammar, spelling or punctuation errors, which is always a plus :)

Nice job! Thanks for requesting a review, and I hope my comments are helpful to you :)

academica

Author's Response: THANK YOU :)

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