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Review:lemonpeeps says:
Okay!! How you doing? Good I hope!!

First of I give you props because you wrote mostly in dialogue and that's my personal favorite style to read/write and that you did it correctly!! I know you said in your A/N that you didn't really like introductions, I normally love introductions but it worked here because you were able to introduce almost everything as the chapter progressed. Even as I say that maybe when you talk about the girls add a little more information about them like what kind of a person Em is, why Evie makes fun of people. I kind of found that I got them mixed up because I just had a name to remember them by.

Hope this is what you were looking for

Happy Writing
lemonpeeps ox

Author's Response: Yay! I tend to write primarily in dialogue because when I don't, everything comes across awkward.. I'm glad I've done okay with it. *phew*

Thank you for your comments! My intention is to kind of define the OCs further in the next couple of chapters, and give some more insight. I think I'm going to be building up the setting and the characters and their relationships steadily, as I build up the plot.


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