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Review:Lunnah says:
Hi there!! :-)

Wow...this is really tragic! This is a really creative approach to a Next Generation fic! I've never read anything about the death of any of the new characters, so this was really interesting for me. I kind of have a weakness for tragic stories, especially fanfiction, as the Harry Potter series is kind of about death and examining all of her references to it leads to a lot of thought-provoking material.

I liked how you approached this with Albus as a Slytherin, wondering if he felt overwhelmed by who he had become at school. I like that you made him the more prominent brother, as people generally give most of the popularity to James. I can't even imagine Harry and Ginny burying one of their children! I feel sad for James and Lily and Rose here as well, but obviously we don't know them as well and it just breaks my heart to think of them losing their son :-/

I noticed a few typos. I think you meant Godric's Hollow instead of Godric Hallows unless you changed something. Also, when you said "You're my little brother, and now your gone." the second "your" should be "you're." :-)

This is actually the first song fic I've ever read and I liked it! I think you did a great job portraying James's thought process and the family's grief.

Thanks for posting!
~Lunnah

Author's Response: Hello! (:

Wow, you've never read anything about death for the next generation? I hope I did it justice! (:

Yeah, I really wanted to make Albus a Slytherin, cause it might have been very hard on him to be in a house his family "hated"

Yeah, I agree, I have always read stories with James amazing at everything, I wanted to change it up a little.

Yes, I agree. Burying their son, that would be absolutely horrible.

Oh, yes, I didn't catch the Godric's hallows, thank you, and with the you're as well, thank you for that (:

Yay, first song fic (:

Thank you so much for what you said to me, it really means a lot (:

~Sarah
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