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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Wow, this was fantastic! The action scene was perfectly done - very fast-paced and suspenseful, and it was interesting to watch Dorcas navigate through a situation that us readers already know and understand. I think that you could make this into a much longer piece, if you wanted, as your characters are already well-developed and I'm curious how Dorcas will deal with the consequences of her detective work. It does, however, function well as a one-shot, giving us a snapshot of how people reacted to Myrtle's death and the atmosphere of Hogwarts during that time.

I love how you've done your own thing with this period - so many (including myself) usually make McGonagall the heroine, suspicious of Tom Riddle or otherwise a strong-willed Hermione-like figure, but you've changed that and made it entirely plausible. It's so hard to guess at what she'd be like as a teenager, so anyone who says that your McGonagall is OOC wouldn't be able to justify such an accusation - I actually imagined that she was under some sort of spell, whether it be that of teenage love or Tom's powers of Legilimency (she being useful to him in some way or another). I'm very intrigued by the possibilities your portrayal of McGonagall opens up, and I also have to admit (although I'm a big fan of McGonagall in general) that it was refreshing to read a 1940's Hogwarts story where she isn't the main female character. Your Dorcas is amazing!

There is so much I could say about this story in its favour. The writing is phenomenal, the perfect balance of description, action, and dialogue, and the additions of lines like "some poorly rhymed poetry scratched on the wall, speculating on Professor Dumbledore's romantic preference" effectively set off the dark, dangerous aspects of the situation. I liked Dorcas's dry humour very much.

Excellent work with this story! I really enjoyed reading it and am glad that I favourited it. Your work deserves so much more attention for its high quality and unique approaches to canon.

Author's Response: Thanks so much, I'm doubly glad one of my favorite writers enjoyed this (and the idea of scurrilous poetry about Dumbledore made me giggle too) :)

I added to the first version and cleared up Minerva's character somewhat, so the prior comments that Minerva was a bit off were actually quite helpful in showing where I needed to elaborate a bit. (the entire third paragraph is new) Dorcas's perspective makes it a little fuzzy whether Minerva is really being controlled by Riddle or letting her own infatuation do the work -- first love is stronger than magic in many ways -- but I'll leave that up to the reader to decide.

Thanks for your detailed and kind review, I'm glad you had fun with it. I particularly enjoyed giving the "behind the scenes" look at the students' reaction to the Chamber of Secrets; I imagined there would be mass panic. (especially since Dippet really didn't seem like the best Headmaster or the brightest crayon in the box; I imagine he was under Riddle's influence as well!)


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