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Review:taylorj828 says:
Hi there, this is taylorj828 with your requested review! Very interesting moment, or glimpse here into these characters' lives. I enjoyed reading it! First off, you had a great opening line! In fact, the whole first scene was a great opening scene, really well-described so I could see it all happening very clearly in my head. (o:

I thought it was very interesting to hear the boys talk about these characters that we know in such a different ways, in their future lives in the books. I've never read anything that gave us a point of view of the younger Narcissa, Lucius, or Bellatrix - at least not something that had a bit of depth, a view other than just pre-Death Eaters.

I really like how you've written Narcissa. For example, how she made that statement about the boys escaping the party, rather than asking a question. It's good characterization and I can imagine that would be how a young Narcissa would act.

Haha, she was seducing him! I love it! It intrigues me. And really, wow, I can't believe Sirius said that to his mum! I wondered if that was going to become the day that Sirius moved in with James. (o:

Well, hot kissing scene!! (o: And I really like how Narcissa was the one pursuing him! We see a low of sweet girls in fanfic who are pursued by the boys. It's nice to see a girl going after someone she wants. Just a nice twist to read. (o; Especially because it's James Potter, who could be arrogant and full of himself most times (so it seemed from the books), here, bested by a girl seducing him. I like it!

Nicely written, and very interesting! Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the nice long review! I'm glad you enjoyed it, especially the opening scene, since that is probably my favourite part of the story. I figured Sirius wouldn't have trouble mouthing off to his mum at the best of times, but especially not when he was drunk. I didn't even intend for this to be when Sirius moved out at first, but it just fit in with their argument so... there you have it. Haha, I love flustered James too! He can't always be arrogant and in control, after all. Thanks again!

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