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Review:Atomic says:
Hello again!!

So, I absolutely love Eileen and Miranda. You make Eileen both appropriately haughty and nervous with the new potion. I can't wait to see how that turns out! And their conversations are the best, definitely realistic and funny.

Your English in this chapter was really good, although I would still suggest a beta just to take care of the little things. Just as a precaution, you know.

It was great to see some character development with Alyssa, too. Although adding in another character might be unwise, there are so many people to keep track of already. I kinda hope William doesn't become a regular. Still, the description of the Quidditch tryouts was really awesome. I definitely liked how you described Alyssa's flying. It was very well done, indeed.

The plot is going really great so far, and the flow is also pretty smooth. But I was a little surprised that this chapter was so short though. I wish it had been longer!! I was wanting to read more!

Very good job! The character group transition was very well done here, it was much less confusing. Keep up the good work!!

-Atomic

Author's Response: Oh I love Eileen, probably because she's a minor character in the books, and I had to place her with someone that wasn't as... sullen as she is, so I went for Miranda :)

So happy that you like their conversations!

Will try to find a beta asap!

I quite felt that I needed to make Alyssa more known, because in the first chapter May is a bit focused and in the second I feel that Eileen and Miranda are so having her take up a bit more place her felt kind of important.

You don't need to worry about Will- he may be handsome but atm he might be in for a few chapters but no-way that he steals my girls glory :P

THANK YOU! I was so insecure about the flying part so it's nice to hear that it was good :)

Oh the chapter, I tried and tried to come up with a way to make it longer until I realised that it didn't have to be so I went along with how I felt it should be and I found it quite ok :)

Thank you so much for all the reviews and for all the CC It really helps and I do hope that you'd like to continue reading my story :)

*hugsies*


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