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Review:LadyL8 says:
Hey again :D

I found this second chapter so realistic. I could imagine all of it. I loved that part where you described and made it sound like Snape was still alive (just not in physical form), but in his belongings and in his rooms. I really loved the fact that Snape had a spell on his books. I would imagine Snape protecting his thoughts and information so well that even his allies wouldnt be able to see them. Its just so in-character and it made everything so realistic.

I love how you mention Harry and Ron, but its also a little risky. Mentioning them also makes the reader aware of the problems Hermione would face if she actually fell in love with Snape. Im not a fan of this ship at all, but I love your writing so I will definitely keep reading. I just thought it all went a little fast. I understood that she had regrets after he died, but maybe you couldve shown us why she would have regrets. Some flashback scenes for example. Thats just my opinion, though.

Okay, as for the description (Youre very good at that), it was maybe a little too much in this chapter. The whole chapter was mostly description. Dont get me wrong, I love description, but sometimes its just a little too much. Maybe you could try to go a little easy on the description. Once again, just my opinion. I totally understands if you think Im all wrong. Some chapters just have to have much description. Im sure this is just one of those chapters ;)

Oh... and a little last note; I loved that you mentioned the house elves :P

Author's Response: Well... The lovestory part is yet to come. This is'nt about that yet. This is about where Hermione is at this moment in time...

Thank you so much for the review! *HUGS*


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