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Review:orderofthephoenix says:
What a brilliant story of Lily and Severus in the afterlife! I was drawn in straight from the first line and I had to keep reading.

I think you wrote Snape really well. You adapted his adult personality and characteristics cleverly so that they suited his ten year old self. His acceptance of his death was prompt and he didn't make a fuss. Exactly what I'd expect from him.

I've got to admit, I didn't realise it was the afterlife until about half way through. You built that up with the descriptions and imagery; it sort of just crept up on me.

I wouldn't have really noticed the ending being a bit rushed if you hadn't mentioned it, but when I read it again I can see where you might be able to add a little more if you wanted to. You've written a beautiful story here for someone who's not written anything in a year. :)

-Sophia
orderofthephoenix (Ravenclaw)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Sophia. This is such a nice review. I can't say I love the way this piece turned out but it did work to get me writing again so I can't fault it there. And I am really glad to hear you thought Snape was adapted well and that the setting was subtly introduced. Thanks again for the review. I really appreciate it.

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