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Review:marissa lily potter says:
I absolutely love it. The relationships you have formed are very real and make sense which is the biggest issue with fanfiction stories. You convinced me that this is true and everything was kept so calm and very canon in the most un-canon way possible... if that even makes sense xD But the whole twist on the relationship between Harry and Ginny made the story interesting and gave it a bit of flavour. It would make people wonder why Harry was taking care of her now, even after they had moved on, and people would doubt Harry's feelings towards her and such.

Also, the entire story itself was great! The plot was unique and something that you won't see anywhere else. It was interesting, the language was appropriate and the story was vert well written. The story progressed at a very nice pace. Not too fast, not too slow. I liked how you built more relationships even after Harry brought Ginny back from the hospital. The complications in the story (first about Ginny not agreeing to go after she had and Albus dying) made the story more alive. A good writer knows where to draw the line and you are definitely a good writer!

The end of course, was great! I loved your description in the end. It made me teary, I'm going to be honest about that. You've used wonderful descriptions everywhere in the story, making it more lively and as if the readers were actually a part of the story but the description at the end had me the most. It was a simple and modest ending to a simple but well written story. I think that your wording was great, and that the order of things that happened was well done. Sometimes, people have a problem putting the order together well, but you had everything progress in a good manner.

Over all, I loved the story. It was interesting, unique and capturing! It made me think about wizard illnesses in a different manner, and illnesses in general. It made me wonder more about the Muggle and Wizarding worlds being connected which was a good thing to think about. I love how you have tiny details, such as where her brothers live, the colour of her hair, the story you made up about the de-gnoming, because it takes something that was done and gives you the ability to remake it wonderfully!

I think that this story has a lot of potential and you did not in fact kill the story. You are such a great writer but I feel that this story just needs to be read with an open mind. I will be honest when I say that I wasn't sure about Harry and Ginny being divorced when I first saw that mentioned but I continued reading and was very happy to realize that everything about their relationship worked. They were friends and they could still love each other even if they are divorced which was evident! Thanks for an amazing story, because I truly enjoyed reading it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for taking the time to review!

I'm so pleased that you find the relationships realistic! And haha- "the most un-canon way possible"... I think I know what you mean. I agree about the whole "flavour" thing- it added another dimension to the story. I'm glad you thought that.

I do seem to write off-beat stories, don't I? I'm so glad (I do seem to be saying this a lot, don't I) that you thought the story had a nice pace. When I was writing it, I tried to be careful about that. Thanks for the compliments! The complications were also to show how much the illness was affecting her mind.

I'm so glad you liked the ending. I toyed with different ideas for ages- I couldn't decide what would be a great ending. In the end, I'm glad I chose the one I did- I think simple was the best way to go.

I first came across the idea for this story when reading the newspaper- and I'm so glad I was able to make it work for the Wizarding world. As for the details, like the colour of her hair, it was just a detail the first time, but then I began to use it as a way to have continuity in the story and help keep it together.

Thanks so much for your entire review! I'm so happy that you think I didn't kill this story (who would kill their own story?). It definitely is different...

This review put a nice, large smile on my face- thanks so much for taking the time to write such an amazing review!


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