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Review:Atomic says:
Heya, it's Atomic again!

I would like to say that this is another lovely chapter!! I enjoyed getting to know Andy and Co's personalities better. You're very good at keeping them in character, the same goes for the canons too.

I was a little disappointed that we didn't get to see Andy's date, but you at least gave us the highlights of it and it seemed lovely. I will honestly say I'm excited to see where this relationship with Stephen goes. I want to know whether Sirius was being, well, serious or not about Stephen being bad news.

I also adore that you made him a Ravenclaw, I hate reading stories where everyones in the same house. You definitely made things interesting.

I wish I could find something to critique for you, but I honestly can't! Your OCs are entertaining, you're doing a great job with characterization, and the flow seems pretty good too. It might be a tad bit fast, but it's really hard to tell since this is only the beginning of your story. Feel free to re-request reviews when you get more written! I've absolutely loved reading your story, it's so well written!


Author's Response: Thank you! I'm a little disappointed that I couldn't make the date scene work, too. I wrote it out for myself for characterization purposes, but it's very rough and kind of unnecessary (Stephen is just a dynamic character, if you know what I mean). I'm writing the next couple chapters now and I'm still shying away from Andy/Stephen interaction.

I will definitely rerequest, and thank you again! :)

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