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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
HAPPY BIRTHDAY, RACHEL!!!

This was...wow. Powerful. There was such little dialogue, but with the few words Ron and Hermione said, a LOT of emotion was expressed. It was very real - I felt like I was sitting in the common room with them, feeling a little unsure, a little lost, and very exhausted. The victorious high is fading, and now reality is beginning to creep in on them - the tragedy, the loss - how Hogwarts itself is broken and places and so are many, many of the people who lived to see the end of the war.

Hermione and Ron are so well-suited to each other, and it shows remarkably in this one-shot. And the shock of seeing Harry when they thought he was dead - you described that so well. The emotions in this story are dark and strong and sad, and a little overwhelming because of the connection we as readers felt to the dead - to Remus and Tonks and Fred. I'm not even sure how to eloquently describe how this made me feel - the best I can do is express that your writing is such a force. You don't just paint a scene - you paint the feelings, too. Everything from the sofa flecked with blood to their hands falling together, entwined, when Ron begins to cry - the memories, the distance already set between last night and today - it feels like a million years of war. It's exhausting, and it splits my mind into several different memories with the barest of prompts - Lavender kissing Ron, Fred lying on the cold floor all alone and all that he would never grow to become, Remus and Tonks getting married and having a baby...Colin and his camera... And to make me react so strongly to that in so few words is nothing short of brilliant.

Really, truly well done.

-Sarah

Author's Response: THANK YOU, LOVELY ♥

So little dialogue because I am so bad at dialogue that I try and keep it at an absolute minimum and get the message across in as few words as possible. I'm really glad that you felt a like that though: means I'm doing my job properly. To be honest, that's kind of how I was feeling when writing it :P

I love writing that kind of comedown and I know that sounds quite awful but I just find it really interesting to tackle it. I've written stuff before about this period but never anything worth posting!

I think that Harry image was really important. I know that if I thought my best friend was dead, the image would stick with me for a long time.

Wow. It's never been described as that before but I absolutely cannot complain. I think I might strive to get that across now. I always aim to make my writing tug at someone's heartstrings - especially the angst - but I'd never, ever have considered it as a force.

Exhaustion is the main thing I wanted people to pull from this. I wanted to show the ache and the pain and how it all still matters so much. Them being together doesn't save them from what's happened straight away, it's just somebody to share it with.

Thank you so much for such a gorgeous review, Sarah. It's really made me think about my own writing.


xx


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