Cheesemaker. That is such a brilliant idea, and you really did execute it so well! I loved every bit of this story, and the only comment I have to make, is that the first part between Andromeda and Teddy seemed a bit flat? I don't know how to exactly describe what I mean by that. I think it might be the fact that there wasn't a lot of action in that one sequence, like maybe Andromeda putting a hand on his shoulder, or Teddy crossing his arms- and there was more action in the other parts of the story? That sounds like what I was trying to get at, at least :P
But really, this story was very cute and funny, and a little sentimental- which I can appreciate. I also found Teddy so relatable, as I am in a position where I am supposed to have some idea what I want to do, but really don't! So, I am extra appreciative of that as well :)
Overall, I just loved this! Super cute and fun, and a really great read!
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PS: That dashing guy on the banner? Wherever did you get the idea to use him? ;) -fangirls-
Author's Response: Hi Sarah! Thanks for the review!
First up, I don't remember who the guy on the banner is, sorry! I asked on twitter who I should use as Teddy and had this one come up as a suggestion, so I used him. If I remember who he is I'll let you know though. :D
You could be right in that the first scene is a little lacking in action. I admit that I didn't do a lot of proofreading before I posted this one - like so many one-shots, I just wrote it, gave it a tweak or two and put it up, mainly so Alo could see what I'd made of her idea. It was a good idea, though, wasn't it? I can't imagine why no one had latched onto it before.
Anyway I'm glad you liked the rest of this, and could relate to Teddy's lack of direction career-wise, which is oh-so-common for people of that age. Heck, I'm in my 30s and I still dont' know what I want to do, so it doesn't always go away. :) Nice that it hit a chord with you, though,b ecause that means I must have done something right.
thanks again, Mel