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Review:melian says:
Gee, I can't imagine a toddler resisting his afternoon nap. Totally unheard of. *grins*

Things like that, and Dorcas' snow globe collection, are what make this story feel so real. Anyone can throw a plot and some characters together, though perhaps not as well as you've done. Giving it that air of authenticity, though, that's harder to achieve. And you've done it brilliantly. Everything about this tale feels so real, so authentic, that it feels like it could just slip into canon as we know it and look right at home. Characterisation, plotting, everything is spot on. And here, in this chapter, I can feel the tension, the hurt when it's revealed that Josef was a spy, the frustration that Severus feels at Malfoy Manor, and the fear that he's going to expose himself. No spy can be totally calm when trying to fool those he works for, especially at his age, but we see him doing his best, which is all anyone could ask for.

A truly excellent story, Pix, and one that deserves more attention. :)

melian (gryffindor)

Author's Response: Aww, you make me blush!

Even the stuffiest of families have to deal with uncooperative little ones. :)

I like focusing on those foibles, as you put it, of these characters. So often, we see only the polished side of people, that well-manicured hedge, the shiny brass doorknob, the impeccable handwritten report... but I think if you look closely, there's weeds and smudges and whited-out ink spots all over the place. Because perfection takes practice.

So here's me, practicing. At my characters' expense, of course! And it would be so much less without your most excellent input. Thank you!



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