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Review:Cleopatraa says:
Well this is Cleopatra once again from the forums with a review for the hooked sentence challenge. First of all, can I say that I really love the title and summary for this? I feel like the title really fits this story well, and the summary is well picked. Itís a quote right? Also the quote you used in this story in the beginning is very well picked

Onto the hooked sentence, since that's what this challenge was all about. It definitely grabbed my attention, and it was extremely well picked concerning the circumstances that were taking place at the moment. Teddy was born in the middle of the war and most people donít take children at that moment but like you said I can truly imagine that Teddy would be his mothers and fathers ray of light. It was a really strong sentence so you began extremely strong but it also fit the end perfectly it didnít seem clumsy or anything of that kind at all.

Your story almost made me cry Iím sure others will also say this but I donít cry a lot you see and stories never make me cry. It only happened twice before that I had this feeling so well done! I like the direct style you have going on here like heís talking to Teddy at the moment and Iím glad you did it it makes the story so much more. It makes it realistic and sadder. I could imagine myself in Teddyís position. You really did Remus and Tonks justice here. I could imagine that this could be truly canon this could have happened. You wrote them the way they are in the book and that is something not many people can pull off.

I really liked this and Iím not saying this because this is my challenge because I really enjoyed and I believe you have such a huge chance to win and seeing you are the first story the other writers have to really give their best because you put the line very high for them. Once again I really enjoyed it and I didnít imagine to be honest with you that someone could come up with something so good.

That's about all I can think to say. This was a really a touching piece and I hope you enjoyed entering this challenge. I have to remind you off the fact you can enter as many times as you want ;P Thanks for entering my challenge and check back after the deadline to see if you've won!

Cleopatra ( Slytherin)

Author's Response: Oh my goodness! Thank you so much for the generous review! This has been so kind, and while I know you're reviewing due to your challenge, it really has made my night to read your kind words. :)

I'm so glad you enjoyed it and that it suited. :) I'm glad you like the song too. While I know it's a more energetic song, the words run deep. Thank you!

Oh! I didn't know we could enter more than one submission. I'm currently working on another one-shot for another challenge, so I may just see if I can work a second entry in! I would love that!

This was such a great challenge idea, and I'm so glad I found it. Thanks! Can't wait to see the results. :)


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