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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Gah, this story! It's one of those need-a-tissue types that have me sniffling throughout. You capture Remus's quiet, tragic tones very well in this, and I like how you used the direct-address style because it really added to the mood, making this far more moving than had you written it in third-person. We're placed in Teddy's position, and it had me tearing up whenever Remus mentioned being there to explain things, or something like that, when Teddy was older. That was a perfect tactic for setting the mood.

And just at the right point, you shifted out of Remus's address and into the action. That part was also really well-done - more fast-paced, very tense, and I could see the point when Remus realizes that he's not coming back. You don't make it explicit, which is wonderful to see, but it's there in that last paragraph before you jump to the scene of his death, which made for a stronger transition between those parts. Most authors would have included more of the battle, but it isn't necessary here because of the style you used for this. Like Remus said, Teddy knows how it all happened, but what he needs to hear is his father's apology and assurance that death isn't the end. That was fantastic.

It's great to see you writing something a little different (at least, from what I know of your writing), and you portray both Remus and Tonks wonderfully here, very canon but with some solid personal touches of your own. I enjoyed reading this very much and I'm glad that I caught a glimpse of it on the recently added list because it was well-worth the read. And, if I'm correct, I get to be first reviewer! ^_^

Author's Response: Oh my goodness. *fangirl squee*

Susan! I am honored that you dropped by this story! Just on your own accord. And that you enjoyed it so much and reviewed in such high praise. Wow! Really, thank you so much. I'm honored.

I don't know if you know how much your words mean to me, but they really do mean a lot. And thank you so much!

I'm glad you found it different from my other works. It did feel much different. Especially with it being a mix of first and second person, and I'm glad you enjoyed it! I invisioned it being a somewhat letter like piece to an older and understanding Teddy.

Thank you so much, Susan! And yes, you were first to review!

Squee. Thanks so much! :)

Drue


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