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Review:academica says:
Again, a good beginning. Usually one's own demons are portrayed as the most dreadful foes imaginable, but Sirius doesn't seem to think so. Interesting. I'm so sad that he feels like he's already doomed to fail, but it does seem appropriate to characterize him that way.

I like what you did with Narcissa, letting her be the one who is supposed to guide poor Sirius along his journey. She's certainly all business, even at such a young age. And poor Lily! I love how you didn't make Sirius reformed the moment he stepped on board the train. He probably would be foolish enough to blurt out the "m-word" without a second thought. I also love that James and Sirius have started out as enemies. Again, you've done a great job of deviating from the cliche.
The bits with Snape were interesting as well, of course :)

The ending was so sad. I really felt a lot of pity for poor Sirius, who is carrying more pressure than any eleven-year-old should ever have to. Are you planning to continue writing this at some point in the future? I'd be curious to see how you write the Blacks' reaction to Sirius's little deviation.

Great work :)

academica (Slytherin)

Author's Response: I really want to pick this story up again as I love the Sirius I've written here. I find growing up in a family like the Blacks could conjure up some interesting demons. It's definitely hard though, I think, when Sirius feels like he really doesn't belong in this family and that he isn't sure he can live up to their expectations for him.

I really liked the idea of having Cissy guiding Sirius. The Blacks' heir is going off to Hogwarts and it's vital that he live up to the expectations they set for him. It's only natural his older cousin help him along the way.

I don't find it natural for Sirius to automatically be a converted Gryffindor. The Sorting Hat obviously saw something in him that didn't fit in Slytherin but Sirius grew up listening to his family drone on about blood purity and aristocracy - that stuff is ingrained in you and you can't magically change the way you've grown up thinking, you know? It makes more sense for him to struggle with this change and how to accept it.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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