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Review:Akussa says:
This was so beautifully tragic. It is short and extremely powerful; I really loved it. Sirius' death was such a hard moment for me, like pretty much everyone else, and to read about it in the point of view is almost a balm on my pain. Picturing him aware of what is happening, not in pain but joined by his happy memories.

I loved the fight with Bellatrix; passionate and to the kill. You also created such a detailed and tangible description of the scene; it was almost as if I could feel the air and smell the electricity you described. You did a truly magistral job here.

I saw a couple little errors, mostly ponctuations but, one sentence was more glarring than the others (maybe because of the emotional tension in it) :

"towards him to late to dodge."; that should be "... 'too' late to dodge."

Overall, a really touching story. One that makes me want to go around and let my loved ones know how much I love them, just in case. Wonderful job,

Akussa (Gryffindor)

Author's Response: Thank you very much Akussa. I appreciate you pointing out that 'to/too' error since to/too is one of my problem spots. By you pointing it out, it helps me learn from mistakes.

His death in the book was one of the few times I cried during the series and will admit it. Doing this was helpful and the experience from reading it the first time helped write it. Thank you again for such a touching review.


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