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Review:taylorj828 says:
Hey, it's me with a second review!

So at beginning the story talks about the Burrow, and Hermione collecting her things. I personally like the idea that the 'trio' might choose to do different things after all is said and done with Hogwarts... I think as we become adults, those are the choices we make, but we find true friends in those who stick with us, no matter what kind of separation we find between us (jobs, distances, families, hard times, etc.) I really adore the three friends, but I think they've always each been their own person, too. I could read a good story about any one of them. (o:

I was thinking, as I read in the beginning of this chapter, that some things which might help readers latch onto what might be Hermione's growing feelings for Snape would be more flashbacks - minor ones, passing mentions, or brief pauses in thoughts... Maybe about how Hermione had seen things as a preteen, compared to how things look now as an adult, knowing what she knows. Maybe little things she had noticed about Snape, and now she sees everything differently. I don't know, just things that connect us to the past. I think for more readers, that would make them more open to feeling a 'canon' Sevmione feel, rather than thinking it has to be straight AU, and it might help more readers keep an open mind. For me, I don't think Snape/Hermione has to be AU to work. But for me, that's the fun of FanFiction. Figuring out how to make something which would seemingly not fit, actually fit into the world. (o: I think people have so many different layers and needs, emotional needs, connections... I can see Hermione valuing these various aspects about Snape, especially when it seems that no one ever took notice. And maybe from those feelings of value, respect, admiration would stem stronger feelings... (o:

I think it was a nice moment you had, with Hermione looking at the photo of a young Snape. I also find myself wondering more about his childhood, after all that was revealed in the 7th book. I wonder what his life was like both before and after Lily... and if it was all worth it, after having seen all that he went through later in life...

I wonder, since you mentioned it, was there any reason for house elves not coming to those rooms?

Oh, and I really liked the reflection Hermione was experiencing in bathroom and she looked over the salves, and various healing solutions, thinking of all that he went through to get them to their point of victory. It was a very strong, deep, moving scene for me, and made me connect more with this Hermione.

And I also liked the the spells protecting Snape's books. It seems very, very realistic that he would have his own resources which he would keep closely guarded - even, yes, dangerous books... And I like how you drop in little hints about Hermione being 'up to something', so we readers keep wondering where it's going. And also, of course I liked Hermione at dinner with the professors. Interesting what McGonagall said about not allowing students with immovable prejudices... I do wonder if we'll be seeing any of that later...? Just curious. Well done on this chapter too!

Author's Response: As far as the house elves... I did'nt want to go off 'out of the way' with elves running into Hermione, who they don't like lol. I love the fact that only Snarky was allowed. Its not every creature... or every person who can deal with Snape and his moods on a regular basis lol.

I do have a few plans for the students who have immovable prejudices... lol. Enough said on that.

Thank you so much for your reviews... and I will request more! I'm glad you have enjoyed it!


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