Not perfect? What else do you need to edit Tanya? This is like SO COMPLETELY AMAZING ALREADY!!! Wow. You are a very talented writer and I do believe that you should write more stories ;) I really, really loved this chapter. You know, usually I get put off by chapters with more than 3000 words, but wow.. you just grabbed my attention and before I knew it, 4000 words had passed! and you left me wanting even more!
I really liked the beginning memory, and then Fred's funeral as well. By the way, I think the way you've structured this story actually makes it all the more amazing. You don't tell us anything, so we're left intrigued from chapter one, and now wondering how Jo's going to interact with George. Gahh, her narration is wonderful, because all her emotions, thoughts and memories and everything are just so.. real! I really like Jo's friendship with Fred. All the dialogue between them in the first flashback memory was really well written, and very enjoyable to read.
And then the funeral. How sad. :( I could really feel Jo's sadness, and having George appear was another interesting moment.
I JUST LOVED THIS CHAPTER. When will you update this? The answer better be soon.. please.. :) Loved this, love the plot so far, the characters, and the writing is wonderful!
- maskedmuggle, Ravenclaw :)
Author's Response: Ee MM! Gah! You're waaay too nice! *dies* THANK YOU! ^.^
See, when I originally wrote this chapter, I had a different idea for the ending that I never completed, but posted the chapter anyway, so I always assumed I'd go back and edit, hehehe. I'm so glad you think it needs no editing! *hugs* LOL I'm constantly worried about it because I rushed that ending, so that really means a lot! And I just love that the story didn't drag for you at all, but that the 4,000 words seemed to fly by! Because this is an emotional story rather than a plot driven one, I always worry that it could drag, so thank you! Really, those are two of the greatest compliments I could have ever asked for with the chapter! *hugs*
Thank you again! It's so great to hear that you're enjoying the structure of the story, as I know it's a bit different than most! And yay for being intrigued! And I never get sick of hearing that you enjoy Fred and Jo's relationship! I worked really hard on that and was thoroughly nervous about it when I originally posted! I'm currently writing out Jo and George's first interaction for the story, so I hope it goes over well!
Yes, the funeral... That actually took me a very long time to write because I wanted the emotions to really be felt, you know? It's so great that you could feel the sadness, I worked very hard for that, thank you!
LOL Eeee Seriously, this is such a kind review! I'm being pestered by pixileanin to update asap, so I'm working on chapter 3 as we speak! It's half complete now, so hopefully soon!
Honestly, thank you so much for such a beautiful review!