Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:Akussa says:

That was a wonderful, wonderful story. I felt my heart was about to explode with the pain this story made me feel. Her love was so strong and the boy, a tad to conceit, couldn't see it. I just loved this trip into this girl's feelings!

I particularily like the fact that you wrote this at the first person; gives the story an even closer and personal feel. I thought you also did an amazing job at putting words on this horrible things that is unrequited love. I could feel the pain of that just as much as the pleasure she felt.

I had to look very hard to find something to criticize becasure the beauty of your writting had me under your spell. In the end though, there is one thing and it is a very personal opinion so feel free to throw it out the window, ok?
Personaly, the very last line bothered me a little. I would have prefered if she'd stayed anonymous to us just as much as she was to Sirius. I like the idea of her love being unknown to Sirius and her name being unknown to us. Like I said, this is a personal opinion so you can do whatever you want of it! It doesn't take away the beaty of this piece or the powerful words and emotions that I was left with after my read. Gerat, great work, I enjoyed this a lot!

Akussa (Gryffindor)

Author's Response: Eep! Thank you so much!!! I hope your heart made it through without any injuries! :-D I'm so flattered at how strongly this made you feel, though! Wow... *hugs*

I'm so happy that the first person perspective worked for you! I know that when I was writing it, it felt more personal than third person would have, too, so it's great to hear that it transitioned well! And I've been there with unrequited love, so I could relate to her as well! haha I'm so glad I put it into words in a way that worked! Thank you so much!!!

hehehe That last line, yes, I get about 50% of people who just love the last line and 50% who think I should have left it anonymous! And to be honest, I'm completely torn! I see it working both ways! And I definitely appreciate your opinion on that line! It's so fun to see how differently people take that last line! I think I originally chose to do it that way because I wanted Marian to put her last stamp effort at being remembered as more than a notch by saying who she was, you know? But I can absolutely see how leaving it anonymous would leave that almost chilling effect of this person who knew she was invisible to Sirius also being invisible to the readers! hehehe I might even have changed it if it weren't already a podcast! LOL

Thank you so much for this beautiful review! Really, it's so lovely and I'm so thankful you left it for me! Also, I'm SO sorry for how long it's taken me to respond! Eep! But please know that my tardiness is no reflection on how wonderful I found this review to be! Thank you so much! :-D

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 798
Submit Report: