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Review:notreallyblonde44 says:
The fourth installment, onto the review!

'The sooner they could confirm Wyatt wasn't plotting the downfall of all things Potter, the sooner they could focus on the real issue' -missing period here.

Angie and Wyatt? Oh goodness, what a twist! I wonder if she's playing the Ravenclaw's for fools or if she actually likes Wyatt. Maybe she helped get his captainship back or to get certain people on the Hogwarts team? Why would she even care to defend Albus then? Oh man, the theories are running rampant in my head!

I don't have much to critique right now haha. But I do have to say that, and maybe this is harsh, you should tweak your summary and banner. When I look at the banner, it doesn't draw me in as much as it could because it's too bright and doesn't cover the depths of where this story appears to be going with all the deceit and mischief. Also, the summary appears to be from Angela's POV, but she's only had a few showing. The main person is clearly Albus in my opinion and I think the summary should reflect that better. That way, you can pull more people into your story -because your story definitely deserves some more loving! These are obviously just my suggestions, take them with a grain of salt. Especially since you made the banner and I don't mean to offend you at all, it's just that it doesn't reflect the essence of the story that I've read thus far. Sorry :/

Anywho, more development all around. I'm growing fonder of Albus. And James is a complete riot. I love Albus' relationsihp with James. It's clear that James gets away with much more than Albus does and is rewarded for it. Love that he wanted James to try being a Slytherin for one day. The off-handed mention of Rose was great too.

Overall, I'm clearly curious and anticipating the next chapter and the rest of the story when it gets posted up :) I find myself more than once thinking one thing was going to happen when it didn't and I really like this unexpected element to our story. The writing was fab as always ;) Next!

Best,
notreallyblonde44
(Slytherin)

Author's Response: Rampant theories are excellent! My summaries, not so much. I'm trying. I appreciate the help and I'm way behind on even responding to your lovely reviews much less doing something about it, but I'll get there.

I'm super excited that Albus and his interactions are coming off well. The sibling scenes were fun to write, having much love-you-but-seriously-go-away-you're-annoying-me experience with my own siblings :0.

I hope to keep up the anticipation and the unexpected as we go along. Lots planned!!

Thanks again for the excellent review.

~a very appreciative Ty


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