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Review:electricfeel says:
Hi electricfeel here again with your requested review.

Wow, this is so different from the prologue, yet I enjoyed it just as much. I'm now even more intrigued, especially as to how the prologue and your first chapter relate to each other as they seem like they could be two entirely different plots. You seem to definitely have a real talent when it comes to keeping your readers guessing and I really like that. It's a great writing technique when done well.

I loved all of the characters in this chapter and the little bouts of background information now and then. I really loved your characterisation of Caine. I loved how he wasn't the troubled genius, but in fact, a bit of a loser. That was a great touch!

Your descriptions of the crime scene were really gory. I'm not usually a fan of gore, but God, I loved it here. I think it really helped to establish just how horrific the crime scene really was. The opening paragraphs were especially fantastic. Also, having the victim be someone the reader is familiar with, again, I feel this really soldifies the crime as tragic and horrible and makes the reader feel that anger that is usually associated with particularly vicious crimes. Some may not particularly like a character like Parvati, but like Audrey says, you don't ever want to find them like that! I just felt that it took away the glamour of death that seems to occur in the Harry Potter fan fiction world.

I really have absolutely nothing negative to say about this. Just keep doing what you're doing because it is definitely working. I can't remember the last time I read a story so interesting!

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