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Review:WeasleyTwins says:
Hi, WeasleyTwins here to review. I would like to apologize for the delay!

I really don't think you should worry about whether this lives up to the prologue or not. Your plot is obviously well-defined and your characters are each unique but not overly bizarre. There was only one thing that I would suggest changing. I don't believe that Dumbledore would have made such a public announcement requesting that those students see him after the feast. We know that Regulus was smart enough to figure out what Voldemort was doing - what if he or someone else figured out that those students were the beginnings of the Order? It would be utter disaster. I would personally say that you have McGonagall or another random, miscellaneous teacher hand each of these people the same note, an identical request at a meeting. Dumbledore was a subtle man, so I don't think that that particular announcement fit with his characterization either. Just a suggestion, of course.

Overall, I really enjoyed the chapter. I think I told you that I don't go for the whole, 'James has a sister that has a sort-of-thing with Sirius,' but I find your interpretation to be a truly delightful read. Excellent.

Shelby

Author's Response: Okay, I giggled when I saw your name come up. Just saying. ;)
*grins* Thank you quite muchly!
Your suggestion is an excellent one. I've actually been trying to rewrite that particular section, but it's taking me time. I wil most definetly fix it! :D
Thank you again, and I'm glad that you are good with my interpretation.
Hugs,
Lucky


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