Hi, electricfeel here with your requested review :)
First off, I have to comment on how well your writing flows. It's really easy to just get lost in the characters and the descriptions and the story itself. So, props to you there :)
Now, I have to be honest and say that I don't read many "fifth marauder" stories. Mostly, that's because Peter's always the villian, Remus always has his head in a book, Sirius is always a troublemaker, one of them has always secretly been in love with the OC, etc. But, I think I enjoyed this because your characterisation was actually done very well. I believed them and thought that they were written realistically. I also liked the tidbits we got from Beth's life, I hope we will see her open up more and learn more about her as the story progresses.
I did read your description, but then I must have misread it, because I somehow thought she was in love with James. Therefore, I really liked the ending. A marauder being in love with Snape seems entirely unlikely though, but I trust your writing, if that makes sense? I think only few could make it work, and maybe, you could be one of them. So, I'm actually looking forward to seeing how that fits into and affects the strong relationship she clearly already has with the boys.
Anyway, I would say that this story has pleasantly surprised me. If you hadn't requested a review, I probably would never have chosen to read it, so I'm really glad you did request because I think you may have proven my anti fifth marauder attitude wrong ;)
Feel free to request again anytime! And I hope this review helped.
Author's Response: That is a lovely compliment, and I am proud to have earned it. :) I hope to break the mold, as it were, with fifth Marauder stories -- or, at least, to remove a tidbit of the cliche associated with it.
Beth is firmly friends with all four boys, and she liked Snape before becoming a Marauder, so it's a bit of an oxymoron. I am glad to hear you enjoyed the story!
Thank you for your awesome review!