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Review:The Quiet Girl says:
I knew it! I knew there would be something to prevent Lily and Severus from getting together! I felt so sorry for Lily, imagining how heartbroken she must have felt. :( And for Severus, unable to get out of the house. I knew when going in that their pairing couldn't work, but I was still rooting for them to have a happy childhood memory together. Oh, well.

I liked the way you portrayed your characters. Petunia was just perfect! I could tell how impatient she was at the wedding, not really wanting to be there but also nosy enough to see what would happen. And she also didn't say anything when Lily left the house at night. Just perfect. I also liked how you had Tobias Snape. In the short instance, I can tell you only just scratched the surface on how rotten he could be.

Finally, the brooch. The gift Severus gave to Lily. The Prince family heirloom. The reason Severus's parents were fighting when Severus got home from the park. The heartbroken Lily just dropped the brooch away as if it were made of tin foil. So simple, but that made me feel sorry for the two of them all over again. I wished at that moment I could have entered the story and united Severus and Lily myself.

Your writing is great, the story flowing well in my mind. You tied the story up quite nicely. Lily probably remembers that event every time it's stormy at midnight. I really enjoyed this story! Great job!

~TheQuietGirl, Ravenclaw

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the lovely review. This has been one of my favorite stories to write so far and one of those moments that kind of just came to me in a moment.

I find the dynamics of these two characters so important and integral to the whole series.

And awesome that you picked up on the Prince Family Heirloom, nobody has commented on that before ;) I wasn't sure it was so "obvious".

Thanks again!!

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