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Review:xtinjsc says:
I liked how detached Ariana's character was in this little story. We all know that magic had somehow affected her functioning as a person and I liked how you've portrayed that here. It was quite chilling and touching to read about her, especially the way she was asking for Aberforth.

It must have been so hard for Dumbledore to take care of her and see her that way. You've also managed to capture his frustrations really well. And it was quite heartbreaking when I read that part about Ariana being aware that Albus didn't care for her. At least not as much as Aberforth had.

The ending was quite haunting, especially as it was written off as murder. I would've loved to see more descriptions, though, and a little variety in sentence structure, because some paragraphs sounded a little choppy for my taste. ;)

Overall, it was an interesting read for me, so thank you!

xtinjsc (Hufflepuff)

Author's Response: Awwies, thank you for the compliments. Honestly, I didn't put much work into this fanfic. I do need to go back and write a few things. Thank you so much for your wonderful review :)

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