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Review:LovlyRita says:
As an avid Lily/Snape fan, this story was recommended to me to read, since that's been one of my great loves for several years :)
I have to be honest with you, I'm always very wary of these types of poetic stories. As a validator, I'm in the queue a lot and I see people try to create these types of things with obscure metaphors that don't really make sense, even though they are written well.

This story was not like that at all. The obscure metaphors worked so well, and they made SENSE. It was gorgeous, and it absolutely painted an accurate and heartbreaking portrait of what Severus must have felt for Lily during all that time. I tend to take an optimistic tone when I write them, at least giving Severus some semblance of a relationship with Lily regardless of what Canon says. However, I think this is the most realistic, most canon portrayal of what his mind must have been like, and it's written so well.

When you really have to think about the story, understanding that each word means something's an achievement. Excellent work here. You should be proud :)

Author's Response: Oh wow, a review from LovlyRita! This is my *shocked* face. o.O

Thank you so much for this review. It means a lot to me especially because 1) you're a fan of the ship and 2) you admittedly are wary of stories written like this. It makes the praise so much more meaningful. Generally, I tend to use a much more straightforward writing style, and this was one of my attempts to break out of that box. I'm glad it worked!

I have written a few Snape/Lily fics in the past - a number of which were completely horrendous and cliche. It's one of my favorite pairings, but in my experience it's been really difficult finding a way to write them that I was really happy with. Like you, I usually try to take some kind of optimistic approach, because I find the whole thing very heart-wrenching. But just about every Snape/Lily fic out there casts Snape as this pining character who sees Lily as absolute perfection, and somewhere along the way I said to myself, no, there had to be times when he felt unimaginable bitterness towards her for everything that happened - maybe even felt she strung him along and then turned her back on him and got herself a jerk boyfriend.

I think this approach worked so well with this kind of writing style because it's more of an exploration of Snape's mind than of their relationship, and I like to think he is a fairly intellectual guy, and these mythological references and metaphors really seemed to fit.

Again, thank you so much for reading and reviewing this, and for your wonderful comments!


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