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Review:electricfeel says:
Hi, electricfeel here with your requested review :)

I thought this was a really good chapter. Describing the process of how the letters were delivered was a really nice touch and a nice way to begin your story.

My heart soared when I read Severus having a nice family life! To have a stable family and such a loving mother was just so lovely to read. I adored the little bits of information given to us about his mother and where Snape's interest in potions began. it was just so endearing!

I also loved the fleeting scene with James Potter. That was a great touch, it really reinforces the idea of how you have switched the personalities. Does this mean that James will be nice to Snape? That would be interesting to see! Haha.

Adding the small touch with the bag of money meant your story ended on a slight cliffhanger, it was a great way to pique the interest of readers. However, I think the way you've written this story would be enough to interest any reader back for chapter two.

I noticed no spelling and grammar issues and it all flowed well. I hope this review helped and feel free to request again :)

Author's Response: Hey there!

So glad you like the story so far! People seem to like the bit about the letters, and it was certainly fun to imagine would it would be like "behind the scenes" and write about it.

Yes, I always feel so awful for poor Severus, so I jumped at the chance to write a story in which he could get a fair shake. I really wanted to emphasize his relationship with his mom, so I combined the attachment shown to her in canon (with the Prince moniker) with the happy family I wrote as part of the switch.

I'm glad you liked the Potter moment. A lot of people were confused by it, but I just added it in as a little detail. Unfortunately, he's not a big part of the story, but it would definitely be interesting to see him getting friendly with Snape. Great idea! :)

I'm also glad you were happy with the ending, and that my writing is ... enticing? Thanks :)

I may just return to you with a re-request. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

academica


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