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Review:Prongs05JP says:
Ahaha! That was pretty good! I really enjoyed the characterization of Sirius here, its very unique! Of course most people write about how much he wanted to be in Gryffindor just to annoy his parents, but I never really considered if Sirius could possibly have wanted to be in Slytherin to *avoid* disappointing his parents. It's a very decent new perspective! His narrative was fairly amusing, "better put this diary away before I look like a complete wanker" now that DEFINITELY seems in character for Sirius. I don't suppose he'd normally be the kind of guy who could keep a diary, eh?

Only a few improvments I could make on the story, actually - the primary one of these being spellng and grammar. *Puts on silly-pedantic-snobbish hat* In some places you haven't capitilized at the beginnings of sentences, and there were a few spelling mistakes here and there - but all of these sorts of things could easily be fixed by getting a beta. Just someone to check your chapters through for you and then let you post them - they're ever so helpful! :')

But all in all, I did really quite enjoy this! Can't wait to see whose diary entry you decide to put up next, perhaps this shy boy on the bed next to him? ;) Either way, brilliant job and a very unique idea!

6/10 Well done!
--Nick x

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Forum Name: Prongs05JP
House: Hufflepuff

Author's Response: hey! so glad you enjoyed it, hope the rest lives up to your very nice review :) anyhow, will fix those grammatical things..am pretty sure there will be more of them too, I always tend to miss things and never capitalize..so. hope we can overlook the fact that none of them would keep a diary!
cheers


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