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Review:Akussa says:

This is a good little story my dear! You did a wonderful job portraying Marcus' nervousness and how he actually doesn't even care. I was impressed at how easy Marcus got into the team; the reasons the coach gave were really good though so that makes up for it!
I have to say that I absolutly loved the end and how the two families met. I laughed so much imagining what a great first impression he was making!

There were some typos scattered through this piece that bothered me a little. It took my attention away when I had to re-read sentences a couple times but it's nothing huge. I suggest you go back and re-read it and you will know what I'm talking about. It's mostly words in the wrong order and that sort of things.

Akussa (Gryffindor)

Author's Response: A lirate! The team Marcus is known for their rough play which is the reason I chose him to go to them :P I mean he wasn't all that bright in school so I thought hey maybe he'd play Quidditch. I mean he was half decent :)

Lol I don't think the Grengrasses agree about their first impression. I'll re-read this and pick out those annoying errors.

Thank you for your review fellow Lirate :)

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